First Draft Feedback

Targets:

• Tote bag is difficult to see on website
• On audio-visual, brand logo and slogan need to be different font sizes
• Add competition to website for interactivity
• Add QR code and social media info to contents pages
• Add section names on contents pages (eg. 'fashion', 'beauty')
• Include dynamic element on website
• Use anchoring text over large images on contents pages
• Make 'Shop the collection' title on website larger
• Increase brightness on opening photo on website
• Add advertising for boots in audio-visual on website - 'buy here'
• Forward-facing front cover of Bea works better 
• Make barcode smaller on Bea's front cover
• Add more content to home tab
• Make font on website bolder
• Make masthead bigger on website
• Reduce 'cover look' section on contents pages 

Intertextuality

Front Cover 1

"fall in love again and again" - lyric from 'Everything is romantic' by Charli XCX featuring Caroline Polachek

Contents 1

"maybe romance is a place" - lyric from 'Romance' by Fontaines D.C.

"mascara on diamond eyes" - references to songs 'Mascara' and 'Diamond Eyes' (along with album of the same name) by Deftones

"on Wednesdays we wear leopard print" - 'on Wednesdays we wear pink' line from Mean Girls  

"just you wait" - lyric from Alexander Hamilton from the Hamilton soundtrack

"oh boy..." - lyric from 'Manchild' by Sabrina Carpenter

Front Cover 2

"the life of a showgirl" - album by Taylor Swift

Contents 2

"the summer I wore jerseys and jorts" - reference to 'The Summer I Turned Pretty'

"you said you liked my hair" - lyric from 'Apple Cider' by beabadoobee

"winter is coming" - line from Game of Thrones 

"I wish I knew how to quit you" - line from Brokeback Mountain

First draft

https://cuthbertbeau.wixsite.com/etoile

Magazine production

 I have added to my front cover for the first edition but I now need to add price and date information along with my main coverline and sell lines.

I have adjusted the layout of my contents pages and now need to add my editor's letters along with my contents.

Magazine production

 I have added images to my contents pages and I am considering changing my subtitles to fit my images better. I am going to write my contents over the weekend along with my cover lines so that I can add these to my print products on Monday.

Magazine production

 Here is my current progress on my print products. I still need to write my editor's letters and write my contents on both contents pages, I also need to add cover lines to my front covers, but I am happy with my images and how I have edited them and placed them.

Website production

 I have continued editing the 'fashion' tab of my blog, encouraging the audience to interact by purchasing the dress worn by the cover star of my first edition.
 

Magazine production

 I have began creating my contents page for the first edition of my magazine. I am going to place my editor's lettering the black box and page my contents in the blank section.

Magazine production

 

I am going to add cover lines to both versions and ask for peer feedback when I present my first draft.

Magazine production

I have create mock ups for two front covers to help me decide between the two images for the two front covers.

I am going to add cover lines to both versions and ask for peer feedback when I present my first draft.

Magazine production

 

I have reshot some photos and feel more confident using these within my front cover for the second edition of my magazine.

Magazine production

 I have done some experimentation with cover line fonts and the colour of my masthead.

Magazine production

 I have changed the position of my masthead and made some edits to my original photo.

Website production

 I have added photos to the "top stories" section of my homepage. I am going to caption these, indicating that they are articles.

Magazine production

 I have began creating my first front cover. I still need to add my cover lines and edit the placement of my masthead.

Magazine production

 

I have reshot some of my photos and have uploaded these, ready to use within my final product.

Website production